Sometimes people write such awful, villainous characters and people ask: ‘Is the author secretly a horrible monster to be able to come up with this stuff?’ George RR Martin and Karin Slaughter come to mind on my own bookshelf.
Other times, authors try and
tackle delicate, depressing, violent or otherwise disgusting topics and just
end up coming across like they are in favour of it. Instead of readers being
awed by the villain, they’re just disgusted with the author.
So today, I want to talk about
the character’s voice, VS the author’s voice. In the hope that you
can avoid this particularly treacherous pitfall.
There is, hopefully, a difference
between the beliefs and ideals of your characters and yourself, as the author.
If all your characters believe what you believe—including your villains—you would
struggle to have any conflict and it would, overall, be a very boring story.
However, if you are trying to
write a racist character, how do you do it well without coming across, as,
well, racist?
I just read this line in a story:
‘They had two of the most gorgeous children you will ever meet; a
blonde haired, blue eyed dream of a girl and her strikingly handsome ten-year-old
brother.’
Its narrative, not dialogue. So, its
information from the author to the reader. Has the author ever met ten year
olds? Do they really think ‘strikingly handsome’ is applicable to a ten-year-old?
I’m not sure about you, but it makes me deeply uncomfortable, as I suspect I
have just read a story written by a paedophile.
Creepiness factor aside, this
issue has come up before in my writing group, where material comes across as
racist, sexist or otherwise offensive and the author becomes incensed, saying ‘It’s
not me, it’s the character!’
However, there is a huge
difference between information we are given by the author and the character’s
point of view, thoughts and feelings. If you want to make a character
racist, sexist or controversial in some way, you want to make damn sure you
know the difference.
Let’s take the above example. How
would I take the same information and make it not weirdly sexualising of a
child? Easily. Take out the sexualising words.
EG: ‘They had two of the most adorable children
you will ever meet; a blonde haired, blue eyed angel of a girl and her cutely freckled
ten-year-old brother.’
Okay, that’s much more
comfortable. But what if we wanted the reader to be uncomfortable? What if the
POV character is a paedophile and we want to show that without sounding like a paedophile
ourselves? We looked for a deeper POV.
EG: ‘He gripped the chain link fence, watching
the children swing higher and higher in the playground. She was the most
beautiful little girl he’d ever seen, with her lithe, pale legs and short pink
skirt. As the swing, peaked he’d catch a glimpse of blue panties.’
I feel dirty writing that, but
you get the idea. However, if I strip out the POV elements, it’s even worse:
EG: ‘She was the most beautiful little girl, with
lithe, pale legs and a short pink skirt. As she swung on the swing, you could
catch a glimpse of her blue panties.’
Hopefully, you see the
difference. Generally speaking, deeper character POV is better anyway, as it
fosters a deeper connection between the reader and the character. If you are
writing a villain like this, the deeper POV will make the reader much more
uncomfortable, which is the goal.
Let’s look at another example:
EG: ‘Unable to fight, the women were all in the
basement, where they would be safe.’
This is sexist, because it is
implying the women are in the basement because they are unable to fight. What
you need to do, is show the women are in the basement because whoever is in charge believes they are
unable to fight.
EG: ‘Amid protests, Captain Greggory sent the
women and children to the basement, claiming they would be safe there.’
Everyone is going to make a
mistake like this eventually. Even my sweetest, most tolerant friends, and my fiercest
social justice friends, have tripped up and misworded something in an
unflattering way. If someone says, ‘this is racist/sexist/offensive’, don’t
argue and explain why it’s supposed to be. Check the attribution, assign it
properly.
Remember, give someone ownership
of your offensive beliefs, if you don’t, to the reader, they’re YOURS.